original stories

[melodypottersnape]

I thought I would make this thread so people could talk about original stories they've written, thought of, and lost their muse on.

My first story was about a world were 25% of the population has an odd ability. In the past a woman had the ability create natural disasters.(In the sense she could create storms, tornados, whirlwinds, lava to come out of nowhere. She could adjust the size and everything.) People both feared and worshipped her. At first she was used by her village to help crops and things like that. Then they sold her out to soldiers as a promise for fortune and to be left alone. Then she was turned into a weapon. Eventually she snaps and destroys the country using her and starts taking over the world.

Eight people imprison her with the consequence of turning into a spirit of their power. Seven turns into the spirit of their element.(Water, fire, air, earth, lightening, holy, dark) The last had the power to bind people.(Power, body,soul) and he literally turned into the crystal object that incased her and which the elemental spirits power. He can actually get his image to appear like a reflection on the crystal.

But they were told before this that someone would come who could defeat her around the time their spirits would run out of energy to bind the woman. The spirits would then fade.

The story centered on a girl born with the ability to control the elements (fire, wind, ect.) The village she lives in is attacked by a country who wants to use her as a weapon to start a war with the other countries. She fakes her death and inrolls in the army of the kingdom her village was apart of. There she makes everyone believe that her power was only lightening. She makes friends with the kings favored nephew. She reveals herself to everyone to save him. The king tells her the prophecy and how she must go to each temple of an elemental spirit for them to increase her ability with each element and that she must do it quickly because the increase in natural disasters points out that the bound woman's powers are leaking out.

I got to nine pages and then my dad accidentally deleted it. I never got futher that the idea really though I've been thinking of restarting again recentally. Though now when I look a the girl with the elemental powers reminds me a bit of the avatar.




Another one is based off a small bit I can remember from a dream. I haven't written any of it. I've just came up with the idea and have kinda outlined it.

In this world people 10% of the population has an affinity for a certain element magic. Water, fire, earth, and air. The Royal family is able to light magic to heal and summon creatures of light and the spirit of magic itself with the help of a magical object. The royal family when tested show up like nonmagicals cause no one knows how to test for light magic. THERE HAS NOT BEEN AN EARTH USER IN A HUNDRED YEARS.

But the humans are not alone. There is another species, giants, that can grow to ten feet at the highest. They have the ability to control things with their mind.(at least some do) They look just like humans except for their size. There is other species with their own countries too.

Lauria is the princess. When she is eight the giants attacks her nation with the help of some traitors and win. Her family is killed but she is smuggled away by her mother's retired guard who was visiting that day.

During the take over the magical humans are immediately snatched up to serve in the army. From eight to twelve her mother's guard trains her in all physical ways of fighting. She becomes a prodigy. She learns that in the past the magical object that helped the royal family summon the spirit of magic was put back into the place it came from.

It is not known where only that it is somewhere in the capital. The downside is that the only way she can find this object is to join the army(that the giants use in attempt to take over the other nations) and get a high enough position to be moved to the capital. So she joins the 'enemy' so she can save her people. The guard joins with her to watch over her.

After she joins she eventually get put on a special ops team that investigates places and look into special places for artifacts that the giants can use in their war. During an op she is powerless as she watches her mother's guard get hurt enough to be put in a coma.

She believes that if she had been able to figure out how to use her light magic or had elemental powers she could have done something. In grief she tries to do something thought impossible. She tries to do magic not of her affinity. Constantly practicing earth magic she is shocked when she manages a sliver of it. She is eventually able to determine that anyone with magical abilities can do elements not of their affinity. It's just no one ever bothered to try real hard before cause it was assumed impossible.

Eventually she find out where the magical object is, but only the master use of all elements and the use of royal blood can open the entrance.

That's as far as I got

[teehee100]

Both of those stories sound interesting.

I started writing a story about a girl with a tragic past that gets summoned to another demention. I have a general idea where I wanted it to go and I started writing an ending, but I got stuck.

I also wanted to write a story about magical being that were hidden from the world by a spell which made them appear to be human, unless they knew about it. The idea was that the spell was wearing off and the main character would try to stop it. I tried starting it, but I couldn't do it.

[mountaingirl777]

An online friend and I used to write stories and send them back and forth to each other, chapter wise. I would write a chapter and send it to her and in return she would send a chapter to me. Like what some are doing with the RtBs.

The story I sent her was based in middle earth and was about a princess who got kidnapped. there were four people (mostly between the ages of 14 and 20) who went to find her. they had their own weapons (medival type) and horses. they fought against dragons and a made up creature that I can't remember. I have lost that story, I had written it when I was 13-14 and since then I've had 4-5 computers so it got lost in the switches. I had about 5or 6 chapters.

Right now I'm working on a sci-fi. It starts in the future, the world has been destroyed some how (still working on that) and everyone (still trying to figure out if it is just a team or if it will be everyone who is on earth at the time) has gone into space. their destination is Kepler-22b (the planet that scientist say is like earth) but they have gone off course and find themselves in another system. They find another planet like earth and decided to check it out. When they land they find out that the planet is inhabited. When they talk to the aliens of the planet they find out that they decend from the lost colony of Roanoke in the United States. they learn that the lost colony had been taken by the last living aliens because they needed help with restarting their civilization. the aliens don't have the technology like humans thought they would have because when the civilization fell it took the aliens into something like a dark age.

I'm still working on it. I just got the idea a few weeks ago. If anyone has any ideas or tips I will gladly take them. I've never been into sci-fi. I've seen Star wars and Star Trek and Avatar, but other than that I'm lost. If there is anyone out that that sees something that shouldn't be in there or that something should change, please speak up. I've already spoke to a friend about it and he has helped immensly. I really want to make this into a really great story and maybe one day publish it.

[G. Novella]

I've been considering writing an idea I've had for a long time, but it's majorly complex, and would take years to finish...

Basically, the world we know is part of seven layers of the universe. In each layer, a planet laid out exactly like earth is ruled by different creatures. There's the human realm, the Alternate realm, the Beast realm, the Dragon realm, the Realms of Light and Darkness, The Realms of Hell, The Realms of Elementals, and the Shadow Realm.

Elementals=Earth. So, basically in each realm, there's it's own war going on, or issues. The Elemental realm split early from the group. The focus of the story is on the realms of Light and Darkness, where a tyrant takes over and forces the Light princess to marry him. For a long time, both the Light and Dark have been at war. Eventually, he enslaves the both realms, and ends up contorting the magic to follow him, so he can control both. What he doesn't know is his wife was in love with the Prince of Darkness, and she gives birth to their child. Desperate, she sends her daughter off with a rebellion group, who head to Earth, but lose the girl.

From there, the story picks up 2000 years later, where all the realms are explained away with myths, and the girl is just beginning to awaken. She has no idea about her powers, or that her tyrant stepfather is slowly gaining control of all the realms.

I'm not going to give away too much, but because of the sheer amount of characters involved, I've never even started tackling this story.

[mountaingirl777]

Sept 2, 2012 21:09:53 GMT -5 G. Novella said:

I've been considering writing an idea I've had for a long time, but it's majorly complex, and would take years to finish...

Basically, the world we know is part of seven layers of the universe. In each layer, a planet laid out exactly like earth is ruled by different creatures. There's the human realm, the Alternate realm, the Beast realm, the Dragon realm, the Realms of Light and Darkness, The Realms of Hell, The Realms of Elementals, and the Shadow Realm.

Elementals=Earth. So, basically in each realm, there's it's own war going on, or issues. The Elemental realm split early from the group. The focus of the story is on the realms of Light and Darkness, where a tyrant takes over and forces the Light princess to marry him. For a long time, both the Light and Dark have been at war. Eventually, he enslaves the both realms, and ends up contorting the magic to follow him, so he can control both. What he doesn't know is his wife was in love with the Prince of Darkness, and she gives birth to their child. Desperate, she sends her daughter off with a rebellion group, who head to Earth, but lose the girl.

From there, the story picks up 2000 years later, where all the realms are explained away with myths, and the girl is just beginning to awaken. She has no idea about her powers, or that her tyrant stepfather is slowly gaining control of all the realms.

I'm not going to give away too much, but because of the sheer amount of characters involved, I've never even started tackling this story.

that sounds amazing! Really complex. I hope you get this out, I would love to read it!

[G. Novella]

It's something I know I'll eventually have to start though, because this idea has been haunting me for almost four years now! I have entire battles, characters, deaths, everything planned out. There's so many characters though! And every time I try to start it, I get daunted by The sheer size of it all. But do you really think I should start it? Most of the times I stopped because I never thought anyone would be interested... And while writing for oneself is fun, it's also unnerving to put in that effort and never show anyone.

[mountaingirl777]

I know I'm the only one speaking, but yes please start. Just take your time with it. Don't even think about how daunting it could be. Just a pen, a piece of paper and start writing. That is what I do. Get all your thoughts out. Once you got them all on paper then start piecing them together. Don't worry about grammar or punctuation just write. My problem is that more ideas cover up the one I'm working on and I have trouble remembering the last Idea. I wish I could have an story ideas that are for one story haunt me like yours is. If it was me I would get it out as soon as possible.

[G. Novella]

Haunt isn't even the eay to describe this. I mean, I get ideas, but this, it's been literally stalking me for four years, I can't remember what inspired it, but it's something I think of every day. I have individual scenes scripted, the entire first adventure, everything, all sitting in my head. I did try and start it a while back, maybe it's time to go dig up that notebook... Your encouragement is making me want to do it

[mountaingirl777]

I totally say do it! I mean if it is pushing that hard to get written than there must be something. You don't have an idea "stalk" you for four years for nothing.

If you need any help you know where to message me! I would totally be willing to help out!

[G. Novella]

I'd just like someone to read it and tell me what they think I'm starting the prologue already, and after looking at what I'd written before, I think I'll have to redo everything, but I'm excited!

[jaffaninja]

I think it sounds amazing! Don't worry about the size of it. Just give it a shot. It sounds like you've planned lots of it in your head anyway. And even if you write it and it's crap the first time, just remember what Hemming said about first drafts - "The first draft of anything is s**t." I'd love to read it, by the way.

[G. Novella]

Thank you! I'd love the feedback to be honest! I'm reworking the prologue, and I have it all sobplanned that it's just flying by! I'm really glad someone took interest in it, because I'd been putting it off on the grounds that writing it for myself seemed silly when it was such a massive project!

[mountaingirl777]

I would be happy to read it. are you going to post it online somewhere?

[G. Novella]

Err... Good question. No idea, to be honest. Maybe on yourfanfiction. I think I'll ask an admin if I can post it somewhere here for a bit and get some honest advice. Then I can rework the prologue and put it up somewhere

[Chameleon]

Hahah, I'll love to read it too, but I leave it to mountaingirl. I'm terrible at feedback, other than "It's really great," and probably be unable to help you. So I'll wait.

By the way, Gnovvy, it sounds like an amazing story. If that was in my library, I would 100 % borrow it.

I'll wrote a lot original stories when I was a kid. It was mostly about friendships and that kind of stuff. I'll loved to create new characters and yeah.

[G. Novella]

Ay kind of feedback would be great, even a "I'd love to read more!" type comment. Just knowing people are interested in it is exciting! It makes me more confident to write it

[Chameleon]

Hahah. I know you're a great writer, and that idea sounds really good. x)

[G. Novella]

*blushes* Thank you! <3 I'm almost done the prologue, now to ask the admin if I can post it here...

[mountaingirl777]

hey, try out Mibba. It's a creative writing site you might get good feedback there.

[G. Novella]

Mibba? Sounds like a good idea! Thanks!

[G. Novella]

I did it! I posted the prologue!

www.mibba.com/Stories/Read/485156/Among-the-Elementals/

[melodypottersnape]

I like it and it's very well written. Hope you continue it and its definately good enough to.

On another note.
How do you pronounc Genelia? I'm saying it jah-nel-ah. Is that right?

[G. Novella]

Genelia is pronounced like jeh-neel-y-ah And thank you! I'm loving writing it, and it's so relieving!

[mountaingirl777]

I commented and I will comment on there from now on if that is ok. I've also recommended it, though I really don't have friends of my own on there.

[G. Novella]

Thank you! Just read the comment before heading to bed! Not sure how to reply yet... but thank you! For the suggestion on the past chapter, it'll be in one big chunk, but I'm going to play with the way it's presented, because the main character has to hear it still, and she's got a long ways to go :3

[melodypottersnape]

Just another one that was inspired to do in my Junior year. Two girls were told to make a debate on both sides of the opinion on the world ending in 2012. They couldn't use religion. One asked i f I had an idea for how the world could end and I said "Self-fufilling Prophecy. Somebody brought the idea up. Another thought it was their job to cause it."


This is a story were a man hear's a voice in his head to jump out of the way. He does out of reflex and misses getting hit by scifle being used to clean windows. When he realizes the voice came from his head and not from someone else; he freaks out. He believes that he is just hearing voices and starts to head to the hospital; terrified that he has schizophrenia like his mother. Suggestions from the voice make him stop because it starts telling him true stuff he couldn't possibly know. He asks the identity of this voice. The voice tells him that it is God. The voice tells him that the Maiyans(Incas?) calender is real and came from one of his prophets. He tells him that his purpose in life is to restart the world into a better place by first destroying it. Eventually the man agrees to do God's work and sets out to meet other 'workers of God' while 'workers of Satan' try to stop him. He does a series of tasks that eventually causes a Nuclear Explosion. Man shows up at Heaven's Gate only to be confronted by an angry God. God banashes the man to Hell for killing his children and his world. The man finds out that the voice in his head was satan not God.

Passage from what would be in my final chapter if I wrote it.
It was there among the fire and brimstone that John realized what he had done. He had listened to the silver tongue of the serpent and everyone had paid the price for his folly.

[eskimoRock]

Guys, I need help! I've had this idea that I really want to go with, and I'm not sure if it's too cliche or has been done before. Give me opinions?

Basically, in this country, whenever anyone has a child they are taken from the parent to be raised in this special facility. In the facility, the children of the upper classes and those who cooperate with the government are housed in block A, where they are trained to be politicians, teachers, leaders... everyone else is taken to B, where they're housed until their 18th birthday, or selection. When this happens, they go to this room and aren't seen again, but all that is known is that they go off to fight in the war and are never seen again. They know nothing of their parents on the outside. These four kids are kind of able to keep themselves, and while I don't know the details they get out and go into the woods to avoid the room. They find out that one of their fathers is actually the head of the opposition since his daughter was stolen, and she has suddenly got this power thrust upon her where everyone expects her to be a hero.

I know its really rough, but I just had the idea and I really wanted to get it down.

[melodypottersnape]

It sounds interesting and will probably get better once you flesh it out.

[G. Novella]

It's really interesting! But it's a bit confusing at the same time. I mean, you've got a select group of kids in one room, which would be the kids of the famous and important. And then a million others in the army? Maybe branch out more, like create more categories and then have the lowest? And maybe add some corruption and back-plot. Also more back story as to why parents allow their kids to be taken away. And a time-line/when this happens or if it happens on Earth or in a different country/planet like the Hunger Games.

But it's definitely original! It has elements you've seen in other stories, but it's not like, copied And besides, all stories borrow an element from one another.

[eskimoRock]

I as thinking its more like a giant complex split into two. It would have to be massive to fit all the kids, after all. But you're right about the catergories, I'll think about that. Thank you both! I'm definitely still filling it out, I think that's what il be doing all day tomorrow