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Post by ginnyrules27 on Jul 10, 2012 0:49:33 GMT -5
Reviews and advice please!
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Post by Dimcairien on Jul 10, 2012 0:55:01 GMT -5
Wow, that looks like it will be extremely interesting. I cannot wait to see Vernon and Petunia's reactions to finding out they're married, as well as they're horrible parenting skills. It will also be very interesting to see Lily's reaction to finding out she marries James. I really like this group as I'm certain it hasn't been done before and hopefully they won't have to deal with too much accidental magic from Lily. I hope to see more of this as soon as you can get it written.  |
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Post by acevons on Jul 10, 2012 1:26:24 GMT -5
Definiotely an interesting idea and has so much potential. You' done great job this far and I can't wait to read more.
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Post by RogueNya on Jul 10, 2012 15:06:27 GMT -5
Pretty good and interesting ^^
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Post by melodypottersnape on Jul 10, 2012 21:40:39 GMT -5
just curious. Are your books going to be the books exactly or will you add your own flair? I think its a wonderful idea.
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Post by ginnyrules27 on Jul 10, 2012 22:28:02 GMT -5
just curious. Are your books going to be the books exactly or will you add your own flair? I think its a wonderful idea. What do you mean by add my own flair? |
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Post by Nahara46 on Jul 10, 2012 22:39:09 GMT -5
I love how your going about your story- it's very well written . My only problem is with Lily- her personality seems shaky, in both consistency and based on the real Lily Evans. I can't quite pin-point why though.. I might have to read it over again  |
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Post by melodypottersnape on Jul 10, 2012 23:06:01 GMT -5
Some will add or change sentences. example is to make Harry's abuse more prominant. You've probably came accross a few though there are few of those types. chinapps22 and the venquine are the only authors of those types that I can name on top my head.
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Post by ginnyrules27 on Jul 10, 2012 23:09:04 GMT -5
Ah, then no. It's just going to be the books, though there will be a conversation about the cupboard and the starvation.
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Post by melodypottersnape on Jul 10, 2012 23:11:11 GMT -5
I personally can't wait for the blow up at Marge when she indicates that she would have drowned Harry.
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Post by Nahara46 on Jul 10, 2012 23:16:41 GMT -5
I can't wait for Lily blowing up at Vernon for pretty much every comment in the first few chapters- probably attempting to murder him in the process. I can see the potential for quite a lot of accidental magic against him as well . Not that he deserves any less. |
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Post by melodypottersnape on Jul 10, 2012 23:19:46 GMT -5
Imagine the reaction with the bars in 2nd or the strangulation in fifth. I really believe that dinner party is going to end with a certain someone in a body-bag. lol
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Post by Nahara46 on Jul 10, 2012 23:20:46 GMT -5
A certain someone? But why would they murder Lily's mother?
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Post by melodypottersnape on Jul 10, 2012 23:23:25 GMT -5
Never said anything bout lily's mother and the certain someone is Vernon. I personally believe that would be the final straw for Lily.
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Post by Nahara46 on Jul 10, 2012 23:25:56 GMT -5
I'm sure Lily's mother, as long as she hasn't been murdered, would stop her daughter, despite her own murderous feelings.  |
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Post by ginnyrules27 on Jul 10, 2012 23:26:27 GMT -5
Why can I now picture Lily's mum and dad pulling her off of an injured Vernon after the first chapter in OotP?
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Post by Nahara46 on Jul 10, 2012 23:30:09 GMT -5
Because it's highly likely.
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Post by melodypottersnape on Jul 11, 2012 15:12:03 GMT -5
Great story so far
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Post by RogueNya on Jul 11, 2012 18:24:09 GMT -5
Nicely done on the newest chapter ^^
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Post by Kitty279 on Jul 14, 2012 0:36:56 GMT -5
Ha, so they now got a first impression of how Vernon and Petunia treat Harry. It's going to be interesting to see how that plays out over time and how the Dursleys are going to react when they find out about magic.
As for Lily and James ... *shakes head* Another thing that is goint to be interesting to watch. So far she isn't exactly fond of him, is she? Admittedly, it's more realistic than suddenly falling in love with him when she learns she's going to marry him.
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Post by RogueNya on Jul 14, 2012 4:34:01 GMT -5
Great job on the chapter, though expected a bit more reaction from the parents but beyond that it was quite good ^^
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Post by acevons on Jul 15, 2012 3:58:16 GMT -5
I like seeing this side of Marge, a gentler one than she was in the books, but waiting for their reaction to upcoming events will be torture. Great story! |
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Post by ginnyrules27 on Jul 15, 2012 9:47:58 GMT -5
I like seeing this side of Marge, a gentler one than she was in the books, but waiting for their reaction to upcoming events will be torture. Great story! Thanks! For Marge, she's one of the characters that I think didn't start out to be so....evil is the right word I think. But life drew her a bad lot and sooner or later she got a little bitter. Then Vernon started filling her head with lies about Harry and sooner or later....we've got Marge from the 3rd book. |
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Post by brokenquill92 on Jul 15, 2012 12:30:51 GMT -5
I can't find this fic where is it?
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Post by melodypottersnape on Jul 15, 2012 13:04:31 GMT -5
Its the fifth one down on the challenge response board
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