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Post by Point Given on Jun 18, 2012 18:40:48 GMT -5
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Post by Trilonias on Jun 18, 2012 19:06:12 GMT -5
Very nice start. Did Ginny escape the school before or after they found out that the others got captured? And if before, wouldn't a few more students be missing, due to it being Easter hols?
Also, will you go to the end, or just before they go to Gringotts?
Seems like Gryffindor tower is pretty empty too... not that that is shown. I'm surprised no one thought of the Beedle the Bard tales... Of course, Ravenclaws may have dismissed it and forgotten about it long ago... Not too sure about anyone else.
Actually, why would Smith be there? Isn't he a year above Harry's? So he would've graduated with Cho, wouldn't he?
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Post by Point Given on Jun 18, 2012 19:36:33 GMT -5
I'm pretty sure Smith is a Seventh year because he flees the castle before the battle by pushing other students away when they're given the option to leave. If he had already graduated he wouldn't have come back to Hogwarts in the first place, only to leave again.
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Post by Trilonias on Jun 18, 2012 19:39:53 GMT -5
Hmm, I could've sworn... Eh, now this is going to annoy me till I find that bit piece of info. Thanks for the answer, at any rate.
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Post by sailormartin3 on Jun 18, 2012 19:52:51 GMT -5
Excellent story! I can't wait for the next chapter. Please update soon. I love all your stories.
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Post by readingwizard4 on Jun 18, 2012 19:56:50 GMT -5
Smith is in the same year as Harry. Very good start to this story. No spelling mistakes as far as I can see but spelling mistakes don't really catch my eye unless it's a character or something else important in the Harry Potter universe. I just have to include my vote as well for a mention about Ginny being forced to leave
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Post by Dimcairien on Jun 18, 2012 22:58:14 GMT -5
Great start. I've seen a few RtBs with Dumbledore's Army, but not in this time frame. I too and in agreement with a mention of Ginny being forced to leave for the Easter hols. I really hope you have the read the entire book and maybe save someone?
Anyway, this looks like it will be a lot of fun to read. If you need an online version of the book, I have the entire DH as an htm file.
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Post by madlibrary on Jun 19, 2012 2:12:51 GMT -5
Great prologue! I can't wait for more.
I was thinking, and maybe you could add Winky as a regular character. If only for the fact that she could provide insight into house elf psychology, and the fact that Dobby (presumably; I don't think it was ever mentioned in canon) was a good friend of hers.
I'll try to come up with some sort of idea in each of my reviews.
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Post by sailorsea on Jun 19, 2012 10:45:52 GMT -5
I really can't wait to read more of this story. The prologue was really good and I liked how you showed a bunch of different characters in the room. I really loved seeing how much the DA cares about the trio. Can't wait for more, I wish you could add some of the teachers or Madame Pomfrey just to hear her opinion on the various injuries the trio receives but at the same time I can see how that would be hard to have all the teachers suddenly vanish in the school. Please update soon I love it!
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Post by taka on Jun 19, 2012 13:12:18 GMT -5
I like it! Great beginning for a great story.
Can't wait for the first chapter actually.
Hopefully they don't freak out to much once they hear about the more cruel parts of the year.
Are they actually able to change what is to come, or won't they be able to read about it at all? Guess this one bugs me a lot.
Keep up the good work!
Thanks.
Taka
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Post by sloan on Jun 21, 2012 0:42:59 GMT -5
You certainly have me hooked already.
You capture the character's so well, it's simply amazing.
Love all the players here, and honestly can't wait for more.
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Post by mountaingirl777 on Jun 23, 2012 12:52:04 GMT -5
Love it! Update soon! I also hope that you do the whole book.
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Post by xxggxx on Jun 24, 2012 8:52:09 GMT -5
Brilliant, please update soon!!!
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Post by lys8375 on Jun 24, 2012 11:31:53 GMT -5
I love it ! Update soon !!
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Post by G. Novella on Jun 24, 2012 12:02:54 GMT -5
It sounds interesting, but are you changing the future type deal, or is it remaining a just RTB? Anyways, I look forward to the updates.
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Post by TeamSirius on Jun 24, 2012 16:33:37 GMT -5
The prologue was really good so far. Can't wait for you to continue (:
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Post by codygotkilld on Jun 24, 2012 20:29:07 GMT -5
Probably the best prologue for a RtB fic I have read so far. I can't wait to see how this fic is in the coming chapters.
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Post by Spaz86 on Jun 25, 2012 1:33:50 GMT -5
Great start! Can't wait to read more, though I have to admit this site is getting a bit overwhelming with all the stories and no summaries. Makes it hard to choose ones that don't make me cringe. Oh well. I really appreciate all the work you've done to get this up and running. I can't believe you got another story going durring all of that chaos! Great start! Hope you update either of our RtB soon!
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Post by dinosoprano on Jun 26, 2012 15:10:35 GMT -5
That was a very good start and I am excited to read more!
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Post by sexyasthetardis on Jun 29, 2012 6:44:30 GMT -5
Wow! what a great first chapter. I really can't wait for more.
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Post by nunners on Jun 30, 2012 22:17:27 GMT -5
Interesting prologue!
First things first, this site is amazing and I'm so glad I have the opportunity to read this fic.
I loved it, and Neville is indeed quite the badass. As one of my favourite characters, it's wonderful that he's going to be featured like this, so well done! I can't wait to read the next chapters. I really loved it!
Update soon?
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Post by bringyourwings on Jul 2, 2012 6:14:45 GMT -5
Awesome prologue, very smoothly written. I can't wait for more!
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Post by krazykat on Jul 25, 2012 6:13:34 GMT -5
Really good please write more  |
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Post by mrssiriusblack67 on Oct 10, 2012 15:08:30 GMT -5
Hey . i know this sounds stupid but im new here and would like to know how i can read the storie
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Post by ash on Oct 30, 2012 13:53:11 GMT -5
Point Given , can u send the prologue to me pls? Email - ashita9820@gmail.com
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Post by Narelth on Jan 18, 2014 17:37:04 GMT -5
Add and send a current copy to s.shudo92@gmail.com please. Thank you.
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Post by 8lottie8 on Jan 19, 2014 9:30:56 GMT -5
Me too please
lottie@haleoak.com
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