Reviews

[Ithiarel]

Please, let me know what you think about the story so far.

You can help me become a better writer, and aside of that I adore reading your reviews. ;D
I promise to answer each and every one of them.

[Isilarma]

I like it so far. The idea of linking the age line ot the castle wards makes sense, and I like the way you write Dumbedore. You've caught his character well in things like his anticipation of the twins tryign to get past the age line, and the references to Aberforth and Moody etc.

Great start, looking forward to the rest.

[RogueNya]

I agree with Isilarma with her review. I greatly enjoyed this and in fact had never thought up tying the age line ward to the castle wards, makes me wonder what effect that will have in the future, after all it is safe to say the ancient wards from what the Founders used have degraded over the years, least some of them anyways.

Anyways keep up the great work, cannot wait to see what happens here ^^

[Ithiarel]

Thank you both.

Linking the age line to the wards seemed so logical to me, I honestly wondered why it haden't been done in a fic before.
And it offered such a great possibility for things going wrong that I couldn't pass it by - I need the founders in the future after all. Combine that with an experimental spell and a wand reknown for epic-scale backfiring (Rowena Ravenclaw -> dogwood and kelpie mane hair core) and the stage is set. ;D

[nightstar]

I enjoy what you have written so far and look forward to future updates.

[Ithiarel]

Thank you.

The first chapter should be up end of next week.

[Kitty279]

Like the beginning. The idea to tie the age line into the Hogwarts wards is intriguing, and as you said above, there are so many ways how it could backfire one way or another. Seeing how sure Dumbledore was that he had the cup protected from manipulation, it's going to be entertaining when he ends up with a fourth champion who is too young to participate and didn't even enter his name himself. And I look forward to see how you plan to include the Founders.

[Ithiarel]

Thank you for your review. Dumbledore is in for a surprise, that much is certain.

And it won't just be Harry's participation that will make him wonder... There will be some very odd things happening at Hogwarts that year.

Although, I'm not sure yet how much I want to undermine Dumbledore's position. While I personally think that he's a meddling old fool, that doesn't change the fact that he is the legitimate, if misguided, headmaster of the school. I guess, I'll wait to see how things will develop over the first few chapters...

[Kitty279]

Sounds promising I suspect the ward connection will bring the Founders in, and that could be fun. Imagine a Salazar Slytherin who is nothing like people expect him to and thinks Riddle is a bastard? *eg*

And I know what you mean, sometimes you just have to write and see how the story develops. Stories can develop a mind of their own and just refuse to do what they are supposed to! Or you have an idea later on that doesn't fit with the initial one ... (been writing stories since I can remember, and working on two HP fics myself, so I know what a problem that can be)

[Ithiarel]

Jun 24, 2012 7:18:16 GMT -5 Kitty279 said:

Sounds promising I suspect the ward connection will bring the Founders in, and that could be fun. Imagine a Salazar Slytherin who is nothing like people expect him to and thinks Riddle is a bastard? *eg*

Well, I can tell you that Salazar Slytherin definitely is not what people expect him to be. Where would be the fun in that?
I actually sat down in preparation and wrote profiles for the founders. (My one psychology class finally came in handy!) And I tried to come up with personalities that were sufficiently different from the stories told about them, and yet could well be the original historical personalities those stories are based on.

Jun 24, 2012 7:18:16 GMT -5 Kitty279 said:

And I know what you mean, sometimes you just have to write and see how the story develops. Stories can develop a mind of their own and just refuse to do what they are supposed to! Or you have an idea later on that doesn't fit with the initial one ... (been writing stories since I can remember, and working on two HP fics myself, so I know what a problem that can be)

I'm more of a poem writer usually. I wrote a few short stories during my course of studies, but nothing remotely this long. So, I'm trying to not plan too much ahead.
I have an idea of what might have happened, personality profiles for the four founders (including family relations and a few past events), and a few ideas for single scenes. But that's it. Let's see how far I'll get with that.

[Kitty279]

Sounds good

Never been good at poems myself. For me it were real stories, and some quite long, but I tend to lose interest, and when I come back to them later, I re-read and at once decide this can't stay and that has to be changed ... I think in some cases I ended up with about 3 or 4 versions. Needless to say it doesn't do much for finishing them.

Since I am writing on the pc and no longer by hand, I tend to write out scenes and then have the problem how to connect them - and even more so, kick myself into even trying if they aren't that interesting. That's my problem with the one HP story as well - that and not being able to make my mind up about what to do with the MOB in a certain case.

[Ithiarel]

I'm actually writing the story in longhand - or at least those parts that aren't pure commentary.
This means that writing the first draft takes a while. But it has the advantage that I can already proofread the text once while I type it into Word. I catch a lot of errors that way.

[Kitty279]

Gave up on that after too many problems with my wrist. Had to write a lot in longhand at my first job and was always on the verge of a tenosynovitis. So I was very glad to switch to typewriter and later pc. And now there's the problem that I get a cramp because I'm not used to it any more, and that I think so much faster than I can write. As I am typing very fast, it's just easier to do it on the pc. Plus, there I can change around the sentences - in English even more important for me, as I sometimes have to re-read a few times to pinpoint why a sentence sounds wrong. But that's something everyone has to do as they feel the most comfortable with.

[1lyrical]

A really interesting and good idea.

[Ithiarel]

Jul 1, 2012 14:12:32 GMT -5 1lyrical said:

A really interesting and good idea.

Thank you for reading, lyrical.

[Isilarma]

I really, really enjoyed the first chapter. I loved the way you wrote Harry's thoughts, you portrayed his confusion very well. And his 'You're blond' line was brilliant. All the characterisations seemed realistic, and I thought the interaction between Luna and Salazar was excellent.

I liked the way you've set it up and given a plausible reason why they would be reading. Godric and Salazar's explanation of how they got there was very entertaining too.

Overall I thought it was a great start, and I'm looking forward to the next chapter.

[RogueNya]

Awesome job on the chapter. It was quite good, I feel a bit sorry for Harry though as he is normally a bit faster on the upkeep with events, well okay maybe that not exactly true looking back on the big events that have happened >.<

But he has gotten better, in Third year he picked things up a good deal faster then before, more so once he got all the True Facts of what was going on.

Did Harry get his cloak back? I do not remember seeing it being handed back.

Anyways keep up the great work, I so look forward to the next chapter ^^

[Ithiarel]

Isilarma, thanks for your kind comments. I'm really happy that you liked it - considering that it was your story that got me interested in trying to write my own Founders-Fic.

I must admit that I'm a bit proud of how the whole group interaction between the Founders worked out. Seems that writing up those detailed personality profiles paid out in the end.


RogueNya, thank you, too. You saw right. Harry doesn't have his cloak back yet. It's been more or less "confiscated" for the time being - they are probably going to have to pry it from Rowena's grip.

I imagine the whole situation to have been very surreal for Harry. And there was the distinct possibility of it being a PR stunt. So, yeah. He needed a while to come to terms with it.

[codygotkilld]

Oh man, this fic is turning out to be great. I can't wait to see the next chapter soon.

[RogueNya]

lol well that be an interesting event to see. "The Battle of the Cloak" and true I had not thought of PR in truth, but that is a interesting idea. But think Harry would blow his stack if that was the case.

[Kitty279]

Poor Harry and Neville, they must be so shocked and confused! Who would expect the founders to walk around in their time after all? And Slytherin not being what he was expecting had to be even more strange for Harry. I wonder if that statue in the Chamber was even the real Slytherin or only a twisted version from later times?

Rowena reminds me too much of Hermione - can't have done something wrong, right? And needs to explore everything, including the cloak and all the books.

The reading is going to be fun. Somehow I suspect Salazar is not going to be impressed with his so-called heir - and probably not with the ferret, either. Seeing how Draco's fawning over him, it would hit him hard to find out that his hero doesn't agree with his father's ideals and thinks very badly of Moldyshorts. Oh, and I was amused at how glad the men were to be spared the research right now

[Ithiarel]

Cody, thank you for your review. It's very encouraging to hear that people are looking forward to the next chapter.



Kitty, I think Slytherin is going to be a surprise for a lot of people. When I developed his character, I was very surprised by the outcome myself, to be honest. But I think it works, and I'm actually looking forward to write some more scenes with people interacting with him.

Jul 14, 2012 2:04:23 GMT -5 Kitty279 said:

I wonder if that statue in the Chamber was even the real Slytherin or only a twisted version from later times?

Good question. Personally, I think that the statue portrays a very old Slytherin, and that it has suffered of erosion a lot (it's been down there in the Chamber of Secrets for over 1000 years after all).

Jul 14, 2012 2:04:23 GMT -5 Kitty279 said:

Rowena reminds me too much of Hermione - can't have done something wrong, right? And needs to explore everything, including the cloak and all the books.

She does, does she? There is one major difference between them though, which will become obvious later. Rowena is a genius, and she doesn't like to be proven wrong. More importantly, though, she hates it if one of her plans doesn't work out the way it was supposed to. So, yeah, this "failure" really gets to her.

Jul 14, 2012 2:04:23 GMT -5 Kitty279 said:

Somehow I suspect Salazar is not going to be impressed with his so-called heir - and probably not with the ferret, either.

Not at all. Knowing his major character traits, I can tell you that he won't be overly impressed.

Jul 14, 2012 2:04:23 GMT -5 Kitty279 said:

Seeing how Draco's fawning over him, it would hit him hard to find out that his hero doesn't agree with his father's ideals and thinks very badly of Moldyshorts. Oh, and I was amused at how glad the men were to be spared the research right now

Draco and Neville are currently still in fanboy-mode. They probably will stay there for a while longer. It's inevitable. I mean, these ARE the Founders! And both, Draco and Neville, come from proud pureblood families so they would have grown up with a lot more stories about the greatness of the foudners than Harry or even Luna (who might have heard lots about Ravenclaw but probably not the others from her father).

Yeah, and boys will be boys.
Godric is more of the "perfact host" of the group. He doesn't mind doing research, but right then social niceties were more important.
And Salazar is a hands-on, "roll-up-your-sleeves" kind of person, who'd rather just push buttons than read the manual. So, any excuse to get out of research was good enough for him. ;D

[Kitty279]

The latter reminds me of my brother, who once insisted that any computer programme (or device) where you have to read the manual first before using is isn't worth having. By now he has learned the hard way that sometimes you really should read the manual first ;D

[RogueNya]

Heh wish my father could learn that lesson... He always opens stuff and tries getting it to work then complains when it doesn't, then me and Mother have to find the Manual in order to work it. lol

[readingdeatheater]

I am looking forward to the next chapter and may i just say Harry's reaction "Your Blond" was very funny. I hope that Salazar will tell draco off for his behaviour during the books. I also can't wait for Dumbledore's reaction to having the founders at the school. I also like the way that you have not just stuck to the Status quo when it comes to the founders. hope to see more soon because it looks very interesting.

[Ithiarel]

Thank you for your review. I'm glad that you liked the chapter.

We know so few things about the founders, I think everyone has their own mental image of them. It's great to have the opportunity to present mine to my readers.

[Isilarma]

I know the feeling It's fascinating to see how they differ.

[blackroses77]

This looks like it's going to be a really good story, I love how you have portrayed the founders's especially my two favorites Godric and Salazar. Can't wait for the next update and their reaction to Voldemort.

[Ithiarel]

Thank you for taking the time to review. It means a lot to me.

Maybe, once I've written a few chapters, I'll upload the personality profiles, I wrote for the founders. They might be a worthwhile read for others... If there's an interest in something like that, of course...

[codygotkilld]

I would defintely be interested in the profiles. I think your incarnation of Salazar and Godric seem to be really interesting and different then most stories that feature the founders. I may need time for Helga and Rowena since I didn't really see all that much in their appearences but I bet after a few chapters they will grow on me.