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Post by DarkRavie on Jul 4, 2012 9:33:24 GMT -5
Wow, I like the new fic. I like the premise and the explanation of why Salazar and Godric fought and Salazar left. I can't wait to read your next chapter.
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Post by Spaz86 on Jul 6, 2012 12:49:21 GMT -5
Great start so far! Only noticed two typo-type problems
First one is : "What is reality but what we preserve it as," Godric shrugged. "Just because it's all happening in your head, doesn't mean it's not real."
I think you ment perceive not preserve, since preserve Means to "maintain (something) in its original state or exsistance"
And the second is
"As interesting as that is, I don't think it will be easy for us to read through a tomb that size," Godric said, making a face. He flicked his wand at the book and it turned into five books, each one bigger than than the last. "Hm, that's better."
Tomb is a place for the dead I think the word you wanted was tome.
Anyway great start!
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Post by werewulfking on Jul 13, 2012 20:14:38 GMT -5
Interesting Story. I liked how you explained how Harry got to meet the founders. I think it is very good how you handled the whole modern times problem for the founders. Also the reason why the founders are still friends is a good one.
But I really don't think that the old and rather respectable founders would use their endearing nicknames unless they were joking around.
And I would like to hear your explanation why the phrase "Speak to me Slytherin greatest of the Hogwarts four" was used in the chamber.
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Post by Choices HP on Jul 14, 2012 3:37:08 GMT -5
As for the nicknames, I see the Founders all trying to put Harry, and the others, at ease because they are there to help him and so using the nicknames was one way of doing that. That is to make Harry more comfortable with them, if that make sense.
As for the whole Slytherin thing, honestly I don't know where this story is going or how everyone will react. I find the less I try to plan things while writing a story like this, the easier it is to write it. I let the characters react for themselves.
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Post by TitansRule on Jul 25, 2012 7:56:36 GMT -5
Really good so far. I like the way the founders are reacting to Harry's story - and you were right about needing to cut that last chapter where you did; they needed time to get their heads round things.
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Post by rozalla on Jul 25, 2012 14:51:02 GMT -5
I really like it. The idea of how they met with Founders was extremely good. I would love it if you continued to write. I understand if you would need more time between updates, because I can see how it takes more time, especially with chapter such as The Cupboard.
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Post by drawingonconverse on Jul 25, 2012 17:42:14 GMT -5
I'm really enjoying your new story! The reactions are near perfect in my opinion. Can't wait for the next chapter!
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Post by RogueNya on Jul 25, 2012 20:51:04 GMT -5
This is quite a good story, nice to see another Founder story. I hope to read more soon ^^
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Post by werewulfking on Jul 26, 2012 7:15:31 GMT -5
Good chapter, I really liked how you handled the cupboard scene. Great that we had such an insight into the minds of the Founders. But I noticed that this time there seem to be a bit more spelling and grammar mistakes then before. Or perhaps I just read more closely. Do you have a Beta-Reader?
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Post by humblemuggle on Jul 30, 2012 7:09:48 GMT -5
Wow! I love the new fic! The thoughts and discussions of the founders are really well thought out. It seems so obvious once I read it that the founders felt this way, yet I never would have thought about it without your fic. Please keep writing. I think this is wonderful.  |
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Post by nightstar on Aug 2, 2012 13:11:51 GMT -5
I really enjoyed this fic and would love to continue reading. Are you planning on posting this in a different place, if so where is it, please?
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Post by yapook2 on Aug 2, 2012 15:58:54 GMT -5
I love this story so much! Would you mind telling me where you plan on moving it to. I was so sad to see it go
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Post by werewulfking on Aug 3, 2012 16:49:53 GMT -5
I too would like to continue reading your fic. When you have decided how, when and if you continue to write it could you announce it in a thread in this review forum?
I personally would like a mailinglist the most.
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Post by Choices HP on Aug 5, 2012 22:08:28 GMT -5
I am planning on moving my fics to
yourfanfiction.com
But I'm not sure what I'm going to do with this story yet. I was already having some problems with getting chapters done on time and having my stories deleted for the second doesn't help motivate me. I can see that several people want me to continue, so I will be moving this story over to that site, but I don't know how often I will update the story or when. I'm sorry. Hopeful when I recover for this, and get through reposting all my stories yet again, I'll find time and motivation to get back to regular post for this story.
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Post by werewulfking on Aug 6, 2012 5:08:56 GMT -5
Well that is totally understandable. I just am glad that you at least inform us about it. Thank you very much.
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