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Post by melodypottersnape on Jul 12, 2012 0:26:25 GMT -5
Reviews here please
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Post by kumainpink on Jul 12, 2012 0:56:56 GMT -5
I'm not too fond of a girl Harry, but I'll give it a look since you've decided to take this challenge. I do like stories where the Dursleys are called out on their shit.  |
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Post by RogueNya on Jul 12, 2012 1:21:03 GMT -5
I often read the Gender-Bender stories and I rather like them for the most part, only time I don't is when they are badly written. But I look forward to reading this story ^^
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Post by melodypottersnape on Jul 12, 2012 13:03:17 GMT -5
I'm just doing that cause I really like Bill and while I read slash I don't think I can write it. At least not yet.
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Post by kumainpink on Jul 12, 2012 17:41:40 GMT -5
I can't wait to see what you've got brewing, Melody...  |
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Post by Nahara46 on Jul 12, 2012 18:08:22 GMT -5
Like the others, I don't like gender-changing, especially just to avoid a slash fic... Mostly though, it's because Harry ends up as a mary-sue. I'll definitely give it a chance, thought I was wondering- Why do a lot of the OC's parents die of the same cause?
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Post by melodypottersnape on Jul 12, 2012 19:09:00 GMT -5
Thx for pointing that out.
I've gone back and changed it. It's not that I don't like slash or anything. I actually love those more than straight pairings. This is just the first time I've seriously sat down and wrote a fic other than those oneshots I posted recently. So until I've gotten confident in my writing I'm gonna hold back on those.
I will try my best to keep it from being mary-sue, though Harry/Tear will have some personality changes.
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Post by RogueNya on Jul 12, 2012 22:55:26 GMT -5
Nice job on the chapter. A little short and would have liked a bit more detail and interaction between the readers before the reading started, but beyond that decent start. ^^
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Post by RogueNya on Jul 13, 2012 15:29:20 GMT -5
Great job on the new chapter, it was quite good. I wonder what the old coot did there with his Wand after everyone left.
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Post by kumainpink on Jul 13, 2012 16:03:00 GMT -5
A pretty decent chapter, though you might have to go back and edit a few things.
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Post by RogueNya on Jul 15, 2012 0:00:13 GMT -5
That was a great job on the chapter ^^
Look forward to the next, not to mention seeing what comes of Figg and what she has been giving Tear.
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Post by RogueNya on Jul 16, 2012 21:54:11 GMT -5
Another awesome chapter ^^
It was interesting seeing some the abuse that the Dursley's are getting, not to mention what Gibbs did to Dudley about time I say.
Look forward to the next one ^^
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Post by melodypottersnape on Jul 16, 2012 23:45:53 GMT -5
Thx. I'm trying my best to flesh out all the characters. The next chapter will have a lot of blue writing. lol. I was hoping I didn't go overboard with Dudley, but I could see the wizarding world making a torture wear a torture device. Writing Marge is the hardest. I'm trying to not turn her into a completely different person just a woman who realized what she had become. That's definately harder than I'd thought it would be. Piers is just as hard to write.
Oh do all of you believe I'm doing the romance of Bill and Tear believably?
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Post by kumainpink on Jul 17, 2012 5:02:38 GMT -5
While things about this are weird for me - I don't read a lot of Girl Who Lived stories - I've had fun reading this one so far! Thanks for keeping me entertained, Melody! |
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Post by RogueNya on Jul 18, 2012 23:35:13 GMT -5
Good job on the newest chapter ^^
Also yeah I think your doing pretty good, after all I think this is most likely the longest she has been near him not counting the World Cup. So her having feelings would be understandable not to mention her Magic could be playing a role.
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Post by RogueNya on Jul 19, 2012 17:19:20 GMT -5
Great job on the chapter, really look forward to what happens next. Not to mention you bring a good point about the reply letter and really I think a lot of people disregard that issue, I have always wondered how that was legal and it be binding, as it did not have her signature nor that of Petunia, on the said letter. I hope you explain later why that was bad, not to mention what Tear did to correct it, let alone know she needed to.
Actually I think your the first person I have seen even address the issue, and only a handful have Harry sending his own but those were Plot reasons, this wasn't so Kudos ^^
Keep up the great work also awesome spell work.
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Post by melodypottersnape on Jul 19, 2012 19:04:22 GMT -5
thx RogueNya. I hope everyone likes my explanation
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Post by RogueNya on Jul 20, 2012 22:41:12 GMT -5
Well first it was a great chapter. But you will need to edit the chapter and fix the Bold Issues. You had some parts Bold that did not need it, and other parts that were needing to be Bold and weren't, so made it very hard to read the chapter.
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Post by melodypottersnape on Jul 20, 2012 23:19:53 GMT -5
I've gone back and changed it.
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Post by melodypottersnape on Jul 21, 2012 1:39:22 GMT -5
It will probably take a while for the next chapter.
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Post by kumainpink on Jul 21, 2012 3:01:19 GMT -5
That's okay! Take your time, dear! You're doing good so far. Just make to check and double-check your work! |
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Post by RogueNya on Jul 21, 2012 7:02:47 GMT -5
Much easier to read ^^
Can also Triple check for good measure lol ^^
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Post by jeeva160889 on Jul 21, 2012 8:05:28 GMT -5
A great chapter!!! Can't wait for the next chapter!!! What are the revelations? Do post soon!!!
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Post by elizabethk on Jul 26, 2012 16:48:02 GMT -5
Your an amazing writer, I can't wait for the next chapter! Doing an amazing job with everyone's reactions to whats been read, hope you update soon
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Post by jeeva160889 on Jul 26, 2012 19:29:08 GMT -5
Love it!!! Do post more soon |
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Post by IceBlueRose on Jul 26, 2012 23:26:44 GMT -5
This is very interesting and what a way to change it up too since it looks like the next chapter is going to be entirely one that you're adding in. The only things that really took me out of the story were a couple points where it said Harry instead of Tear and then wondering if you meant an Oscar or an Emmy when it came to Quirrell's acting skills instead of a Grammy since that's for music and the only music I've got in regards to Quirrell is from AVPM. *grins* Anyway, looking forward to the next part!
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Post by melodypottersnape on Aug 2, 2012 16:35:00 GMT -5
If you want to read my story Pm me your email and I'll send what I have and any future chapters.
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