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Post by drgnmstr on Jul 16, 2012 19:26:03 GMT -5
Very Good. I like what you did so far, especially with your added elements. Makes it more interesting that way.
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Post by unbeastly on Jul 18, 2012 2:49:34 GMT -5
Please update soon.
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Post by butlericfy on Jul 18, 2012 4:45:50 GMT -5
I like the story. Only on the third chapter so far, but felt I really needed to say this. Do you know that something went screwy with the formatting? A bunch of the lines a squished together. It makes it a bit hard to read. EDIT Finished. I really like the story can't wait for the next chapter.  |
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Post by hpuniverse on Jul 28, 2012 12:45:31 GMT -5
You need to continue and soon. I'm just dying to know what's about to happen. Please for the sake of the sanity of us HP lovers, please continue soon. This is far too sad to stop for any length of time.
Also, I think you should italicize the lines that you made up in the bolded. I just think it would make it less confusing and really project what is happening, because it's a different text, it kind of makes it more dynamic. Just a thought.
PLEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEASE CONTINUE
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Post by xena504 on Jul 28, 2012 19:48:02 GMT -5
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