Thank you!

[Ithiarel]

Oh. My. God.
Thank you so much for posting your story here.

I did take a look at your page (the one you had linked in your profile) but somehow it didn't really work for me... (the background made me dizzy...)

Well, never mind. I'm so going to keep reading your story here. And I'm taking this opportunity to reread the whole thing from the start. You have no idea, how happy you've made me! ;D

[Strange Hearts]

Jun 9, 2012 12:16:51 GMT -5 Ithiarel said:

Oh. My. God.
Thank you so much for posting your story here.

I did take a look at your page (the one you had linked in your profile) but somehow it didn't really work for me... (the background made me dizzy...)

Well, never mind. I'm so going to keep reading your story here. And I'm taking this opportunity to reread the whole thing from the start. You have no idea, how happy you've made me! ;D

Your welcome. Once I get this chapter for the third book I'm working on up, I'll be getting the rest of the chapters for Book I and II up, so you shouldn't have to wait long for that to happen. And then, of course, the third book will be posted up as well. Oh, and sorry the background made you dizzy. Don't know why it would, though...

[physicssquid]

I have a probably very daft question. Why is it all in pretty colours? It's nice, but why did you do that?

[Strange Hearts]

Jun 15, 2012 14:22:53 GMT -5 physicssquid said:

I have a probably very daft question. Why is it all in pretty colours? It's nice, but why did you do that?

I was playing around, and decided on those colors as they were just right, in my opinion. Oh, and I didn't want it to just be all black either.

[19811945]

What I've read so far (still in PS/SS), it has been really great. Just one minor detail (please don't get mad) just the formatting you have extra in certain areas . Sorry if i've been nit picking. Change the format when you have the free time.

[Strange Hearts]

Jul 16, 2012 6:22:45 GMT -5 19811945 said:

What I've read so far (still in PS/SS), it has been really great. Just one minor detail (please don't get mad) just the formatting you have extra in certain areas . Sorry if i've been nit picking. Change the format when you have the free time.

Can't get everything right straight away, though I have been getting better. Um, just let me know exactly where - like, which chapters - and, when I have time, I'll do that. And I'm not mad at you - I even know that I didn't get everything right straight away, and that's actually one of the big things I know I got wrong, particularly in Book I.

Oh, and I'd look myself, but I'm not only trying to get Book III up on here - at least, caught up to what I already had done when fanfiction.net took it down - but I'm serverely late in the next chapter for it on my website, so I'm trying to work on getting caught up.

And glad you like the story so far.

[19811945]

Book I: Chapter III: The Vanishing Glass

Dudley thought for a moment. It looked like hard work. Finally he said slowly, "So I'll have thirty…thirty…"

Extra to be removed.

"Little tyke wants his money's worth just like his father. 'Atta boy, Dudley!" He ruffled Dudley's hair.

"Idiot," muttered Hermione, who, so far, seemed to be the most vocal this chapter. "He should be punishing the boy for being greedy, not spoiling him."

At that moment the telephone rang and Aunt Petunia went to answer it while Harry and Uncle Vernon watched Dudley unwrap the racing bike, a video camera, a remote control airplane, sixteen new computer games, and a VCR. He was ripping the paper off a gold wristwatch when Aunt Petunia came back from the telephone looking both angry and worried.

Extra to be removed. Also middle paragraph to be unbolded.

Both sections are in the kitchen, regarding Dudley's presents.

Will be doing the reformatting, chapter by chapter.

[19811945]

Book I: Chapter IV: The Letters From No One

Roughly half way through the story:

That evening when he got back from work, Uncle Vernon did something he'd never done before; he visited Harry in his cupboard.

"He fit?" Hermione said, shocked.

"Where's my letter?" said Harry, the moment Uncle Vernon had squeezed through the door. "Who's writing to me?"

Extra on first and third paragraphs, middle paragraph to be unbolded.

Just delete the ’s as normal deletion of letters.

[19811945]

Book I: Chapter V: The Keeper of Keys

Greeting Hagrid/Harry:

He held out an enormous hand and shook Harry's whole arm.

"I hope that didn't hurt you," Hermione fretted.

"What about that tea then, eh?" he said, rubbing his hands together. "I'd not say no ter summat stronger if yeh've got it, mind."

Extra ’s to removed on first and third paragraphs, middle paragraph to be unbolded.

Towards end of chapter, both of these two sections are straight after each other:

"Not a wizard, eh? Never made things happen when you was scared or angry?"

"And that's usually how it works," Cedric said. "Extreme emotion usually causes it."

Harry looked into the fire. Now he came to think about it…every odd thing that had ever made his aunt and uncle furious with him had happened when he, Harry, had been upset or angry…

Extra ’s to removed on first and third paragraphs, middle paragraph to be unbolded.

chased by Dudley's gang, he had somehow found himself out of their reach…

"That was probably a reaction to being scared," Hermione said.

dreading going to school with that ridiculous haircut, he'd managed to make it grow back…

Extra ’s to removed on first and third paragraphs, middle paragraph to be unbolded.

[19811945]

Edit: Open two internet explorers, leaving one on reviews, and another on your stories to edit.

Book I: Chapter VII: The Journey From Platform 9 & 3 Quarters

Second thread, talking about chocolate frog cards:

Paracelsus,

"Alchemical genius," Cedric said.

and Merlin.

Extra ’s to be removed on first and third paragraphs, unbold the second paragraph.

"Do either of you know what house you'll be in? I've been asking around, and I hope I'm in Gryffindor, it sounds by far the best; I hear Dumbledore himself was in it, but I supposed Ravenclaw wouldn't be too bad…Anyway, we'd better go and look for Neville's toad. You two had better change, you know, I expect we'll be there soon."

Cedric wanted to pout as he realized that she wouldn't want to be in Hufflepuff with him, then he wondered where the last part had come from. While, yes, he wanted her in the same house as he was, that didn't mean that she didn't want to – or have to – be with him. Plus, in the story, they probably didn't even know each other, so having her in his house wouldn't really mean much unless the two of them began to get to know each other, which, while not impossible, would probably be improbable, since he would most likely be hanging out with his friends, and she with whichever friends she made.

Of course, if she didn't make any friends…

And she left, taking the toadless boy with her.

Extra ’s to be removed on first and fourth paragraphs, unbold second paragraph, leave the third paragraph bold.

And he was off, explaining all about the four balls and the position of the seven players, describing famous games he's been to with his brothers and the broomstick he's like to get if he had the money. He was just taking Harry through the finer points of the game when the compartment door slid open yet again, but it wasn't Neville the toadless boy or Hermione Granger this time.

"Who is it, then?" Hermione asked.

Three boys entered, and Harry recognized the middle one at once; it was the pale boy from Madam Malkin's robe shop. He was looking at Harry with a lot more interest than he'd shown back in Diagon Alley.

Delete ’s on first and third paragraph, unbold on the second paragraph.

"Said they'd been bewitched. My dad doesn't believe it."

"Did his dad tell him the real reason?" Harry asked. Cedric shook his head. In truth, his own dad hadn't told him that. He only knew because he had overheard his dad talking about it to his mother before he had started school, and had heard his dad tell his mother that.

"He says Malfoy's father didn't need an excuse to go over to the Dark Side." He turned to Hermione. "Can we help you with something?"

Extra ’s to be removed on first and third paragraphs, unbold on the second paragraph.

"No more'n four to a boat!" Hagrid called, pointing to a fleet of little boats sitting in the water by the shore. Harry and Ron were followed into their boat by Neville and Hermione.

"At least your there," Harry said. "I'm not sure about Neville, though. I guess I'll see if he'll be a good friend or not later on."

"He seems like it," Hermione said. "And with how much he's being mentioned, my guess is that he'll have a larger part in this series."

"Everyone in?" shouted Hagrid, who had a boat to himself. "Right then – FORWARD!"

Extra ’s to be removed on first and fourth paragraphs, unbold second and third paragraphs.

[19811945]

Book I: Chapter X: The Midnight Duel

First thread:

Now he'd done it. He hadn't even lasted two weeks. He'd be packing his bags in ten minutes. What would the Dursleys say when he turned up on the doorstep?

"I doubt it would be anything that was nice to you," Hermione said, just able to guess what they would say.

Up the front step, up the marble staircase inside, and still Professor McGonagall didn't say a word to him. She wrenched open doors and marched along corridors with Harry trotting miserably behind her.

Extra ’s to be removed from first and third paragraphs and unbold second paragraph

[19811945]

Book I: Chapter XII: Quidditch

Flint foul’s Harry:

"But this isn't soccer, Dean," Ron reminded him.

"Which he needs to make sure he remembers," Cedric said.

Hagrid, however, was on Dean's side.

Delete extra ’s from first and third paragraphs and unbold second paragraph.

[Strange Hearts]

Okay, everything that you've mentioned has been fixed up. Um, if it comes to parts where I need to unbold something, and there's an extra , just tell me to add a slash to the extra . Apparently, I forgot to do that, which is why the extra is there more often than not.

[19811945]

Book 1: Chapter XIII: The Mirror or Erised

First thread:

"He was provoked, Professor Snape," said Hagrid, sticking his huge hairy face out from behind the tree. "Malfoy was insultin' his family."

Need to be bold.

His next present also contained candy – a large box of Chocolate Frogs from Hermione.

"Thanks, Hermione," he said.

"Welcome," Hermione answered.

This only left one parcel. Harry picked it up and felt it. It was very light. He unwrapped it.

Please put slash / in second – second and third paragraphs will be unbolded

[19811945]

Book 1: Chapter XV: Norbert The Norwegian Ridgeback

Talking to Hagrid to try and get rid of Norbert:

"I can't," said Hagrid. "He's too little. He'd die."

Needs to be bold.

[19811945]

Book 1: Chapter XVI: The Forbidden Forest

Towards the end of the chapter, second thread:

b]Hermione was running toward them down the path, Hagrid puffing along behind her.

"I'm fine," said Harry, hardly knowing what he was saying. "The unicorn's dead, Hagrid, it's in that clearing back there."

"This is where I leave you," Firenze murmured as Hagrid hurried off to examine the unicorn.

[/b][/quote]

Bracket – [ – to be added at the first b to make the area bold.

[19811945]

Book 1: Chapter XVII: Through The Trapdoor

First thread, exam time:

The idea of Voldemort certainly scared them, but he didn't keep visiting them in dreams, and they were so busy with their studying they didn't have much time to fret about what Snape or anyone else might be up to.

"It sounds so perfect," said Hermione dreamily. Cedric and Harry looked at her as if she was crazy.

"I mean the studying," she clarified. "Being so busy studying that you can't really think or fret about anything."

They still looked at her as if she was crazy.

"It does sound nice," Luna said, "though I do suspect that it won't stay nice as the years go on."

The two boys shifted their 'are you crazy?' looks from Hermione to Luna.

Their very last exam was History of Magic. One hour of answering questions about batty old wizards who'd invented self-stirring cauldrons and they'd be free, free for a whole wonderful week until their exam results came out. When the ghost of Professor Binns told them to put down their quills and rolled up their parchment, Harry couldn't help cheering with the rest.

Slash to be added to the second .

[19811945]

Book 1: Chapter XVIII: The Man With Two Faces

"Of course," said Quirrell coolly. "Why do you think he wanted to referee your next match?"

"Snape wanted to make sure that you didn't get killed," said Hermione.

"He was trying to make sure I didn't do it again. Funny, really…he needn't have bothered."

Slash to be added to the second to unbold the second paragraph.

It was only then that Harry realized what was standing behind Quirrell. It was the Mirror of Erised.

"You know, this makes me think that Harry finding the mirror was anticipated, especially if it's now at the end of the obstacles," said Hermione, "which could mean that the traps probably are not the ones that were actually the at the beginning of the year, if what I'm thinking it true, of course."

"This mirror is the key to finding the Stone," Quirrell murmured, tapping his way around the frame. "Trust Dumbledore to come up with something like this…but he's in London…I'll be far away by the time he gets back…."

Slash to be added to the second to unbold the second paragraph.

In front of mirror with Quirrell:

"I hope that that'll work," said Cedric.

"Why wouldn't it?" asked Harry.

"You would have to be good at lying," said Cedric.

"Plus, remember how you said that you though Snape could read minds?" said Hermione, "well what if it's true and it wasn't an isolated event, what if Quirrell knows how to do it, or…" She stopped speaking then, as they all got what she was saying.

Quirrell moved close behind him. Harry breathed in the funny smell that seemed to come from Quirrell's turban.

First four paragraphs to be unbolded. The first does not appear to be on this area, please place and put a slash in the second b.

"He left Quirrell to die; he shows just as little mercy to his followers as his enemies."

"And yet people still follow him," said Cedric, shaking his head.

"Nevertheless, Harry, while you may only have delayed his return to power, it will merely take someone else who is prepared to fight what seems a losing battle next time – and if he is delayed again, and again, why, he may never return to power."

Slash to be placed in the second .

[Strange Hearts]

Okay, I I fixed everything you found - I was almost afraid for the last post, though, since the character count was pretty low - I was afraid I'd have to take some of the chapter out and repost it in a new post. That would have been fun to do.

Thank you for taking the time to look for these mistakes and letting me know of them.

[19811945]

Book II: Chapter II: The Worst Birthday

Harry sitting outside:

Two enormous green eyes had appeared among the leaves.[]/b]

If I didn't know better, I'd say that a house-elf was there thought Cedric. It was the only thing he could think of that had enormous eyes that would be noticeable among hedge leaves.

Harry jumped to his feet just as a jeering voice floated across the lawn.

Delete the bracket just before the slash on the first paragraph.

"Jiggerypokery!" said Harry in a fierce voice. "Hocus pocus ... squiggly wiggly ..."

Delete the extra b and brackets at the beginning of the paragraph.

[19811945]

Book II: Chapter III: Dobby’s Warning

Cleaning up cake:

Harry stood in the kitchen, clutching the mop for support as Uncle Vernon advanced on him, a demonic glint in his tiny eyes.

[/b][/quote]

Put brackets and b at front of paragraph.

Eating soup:

She ruffled her feathers and gave him a look of deep disgust.

"Of course," Harry laughed.

"Apparently Hedwig has standards," said Luna.

"It's no good turning your beak up at it, that's all we've got," said Harry grimly.

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He dreamed that he was on show in a zoo, with a card reading 'UNDERAGED WIZARD' attached to his cage. People goggled through the bars at him as he lay, starving and weak, on a bed of straw. He saw Dobby's face in the crowd and shouted out, asking for help, but Dobby called, "Harry Potter is safe there, sir!" and vanished. Then the Dursleys appeared and Dudley rattled the bars of the cage, laughing at him.

"That is the strangest dream I've ever read about," said Hermione.

"Stop it," Harry muttered, as the rattling pounded in his sore head. "Leave me alone ... cut it out ... I'm trying to sleep ..."

Put slash at the second b, to unbold the second paragraph.

[19811945]

Book II: Chapter V: Flourish and Blotts

Meeting Hagrid in Knockturn Alley

"I was lookin' fer a Flesh-Eatin' Slug Repellent," growled Hagrid. "They're ruinin' the school cabbages."[/'b]

"Why would flesh-eating slugs be ruining the school cabbages?" asked Hermione.

"Not sure. I think that it's something I'll eventually learn about," said Cedric.

"Yer not on yer own?"

I don’t know how to get out of this one, possible delete both sets of b’s. You might have to do some playing around with the b's to get it to flow correctly. Second and third paragraphs to be unbolded.

[Strange Hearts]

All fix. For the last one, the problem was that an apostrophy somehow got between the slash and b in brackets. That's why it was like that.