Reviews

[eskimoRock]

Please put all your reviews on this thread- they all make me a better writer, and I enjoy reading every one! Constructive criticism is welcome, and I always try to message you back if you send a detailed review.

[sailorsea]

Hey I think this is a really cool story idea, can't wait for more. Hopefully Sirius will be proven inocent in the next chapter or two so that he can add his commentary. Only two comments here, I hope that some of the main characters will comment more (Harry, Molly, Hermione...) as we get further into the book and I also really hope that Teddy doesn't tell anyone that Harry, Hermione, Ron or anyone else is alive in his time period. I think that ruins some of the suspense like when Harry walks to his "death" they would all be like oh no I wonder how he lives instead of genuinely thinking that he is gonna die. Plz update soon, I can't wait for more

[eskimoRock]

Thank you! I'm probably going to post the next chapter up tomorrow, but you won't be disapointed And I agree about them not telling Harry he's alive afterwards, because then you get the reactions about the Horcrux thing, and its much more emotional!

[IceBlueRose]

This is a new one for me and I'm glad that I found it! I like the way that you're handling this and I agree that I'm hoping Sirius can be proven innocent (heck, isn't that what Veritaserum is for? Amelia should just see if he's willing to take it and question him and Fudge would probably see it as a great opportunity - free the wrongfully imprisoned man to try and gain favor with the public and the Boy Who Lived) so that we can hear more from him.

I'm really looking forward to reactions when Remus tries to go with them after he finds out that Tonks is pregnant and Harry calls him a coward. That throwaway line in the next chapter when Harry will find out that Sirius is dead is going to be so sad because I can't imagine him taking that news well. Not to mention Sirius and everyone reacting when Harry finds out that, as Snape put it, Dumbledore has been keeping him alive so that he'll die at the right moment and then the reactions when Harry is walking to his death with his parents and Sirius and Remus walking by him.

Just going by the first couple of chapters, I think you're going to handle all of those emotional moments really well and in a very believable way. I can't wait for the next chapter!

[eskimoRock]

The new chapter is up! I hope that you like it, it took me quite a while.

I'm looking forward to writing about the pregnancy, and I'm basically writing this fic for that chapter where he finds out he's a horcrux, so I do hope I do it justice.

Thank you so much for your review!

[taka]

Wow!
I was skipping around the newest post some days ago and found your fic. I was so happy that I've finally found one of the "Deathly Hallow" ones that were stationed in "OotP". I'm also glad that you chose Teddy to be the one getting send back, since none of the characters back then would recognize him (at least as long as he doesn't tell too much).
Since I've also checked your ff.net account and already read all 5 chapters, I can't wait for the sixth, though I know you probably spend most of your time formating for this site.
Well.
I hope you actually keep up with the good work, don't let Teddy spoil the story and update as soon as possible.
Glad you posted it here.
With Regards
Taka

[Trilonias]

Hmm, I'm surprised you didn't state that Molly silenced Ginny along with the twins, since she was also participating in the chant... is that why she didn't say much? I'm pretty sure she would be a bit more talkative at this point.

I think, overall, you did a good job on this, even if I felt there could be more discussion/interruptions at certain points (like Umbridge questioning Dumbledore and creating a scene...). I look forward to more of your story.

[eskimoRock]

Jun 19, 2012 13:08:37 GMT -5 taka said:

Wow!
I was skipping around the newest post some days ago and found your fic. I was so happy that I've finally found one of the "Deathly Hallow" ones that were stationed in "OotP". I'm also glad that you chose Teddy to be the one getting send back, since none of the characters back then would recognize him (at least as long as he doesn't tell too much).
Since I've also checked your ff.net account and already read all 5 chapters, I can't wait for the sixth, though I know you probably spend most of your time formating for this site.
Well.
I hope you actually keep up with the good work, don't let Teddy spoil the story and update as soon as possible.
Glad you posted it here.
With Regards
Taka

I'm not planning on them telling him anyhting really, before its revealed in the books. I hate it when they send someone back and they just completely ruin all the tension in the book, so I'm definately not going down that line.

I'm about three-quarters of the way through the next chapter, what with formatting for this site and my GCSE's, its a bit of a nightmare at the moment.

Thank you for your review!

[eskimoRock]

Jun 19, 2012 18:02:30 GMT -5 Trilonias said:

Hmm, I'm surprised you didn't state that Molly silenced Ginny along with the twins, since she was also participating in the chant... is that why she didn't say much? I'm pretty sure she would be a bit more talkative at this point.

I think, overall, you did a good job on this, even if I felt there could be more discussion/interruptions at certain points (like Umbridge questioning Dumbledore and creating a scene...). I look forward to more of your story.

You know, I completely forgot about Ginny! Although, Molly tends to single the twins out a lot even if Ginny gets involved too, so I think she'd be too pre-occupied with them to worry much about Ginny.

I'll try to fit Umbridge in more, and I completely understand what you mean about the comments.

Thank you for your review!

[katiejaneway1]

I have loved what you have written so far. I loved the reaction Harry had when Sirius was cleared and when they read he had died.
If there is anything there is one spot I believe is a typo hermione was spelt wrong. As you can. See in the bit below.

“Well, its just…because…it doesn’t matter.” Hermione giggled, and a few of the muggleborns joined in, understanding what she found so funny. Sirus frowned, and Hermioen sighed.

Read more: readingthehpbooks.proboards.com/index.cgi?board=thereading&action=display&thread=880#ixzz1yPX4Pppu

[eskimoRock]

Thank you for pointing that out! I added that in at the very last minute and I was tryng to get it done quickly, I must have missed it. As least I can go back and edit it, that would have annoyed me otherwise.

Thanks again for your review!

[sailorsea]

Great next chapter, I always lie hearing Madame Pomfrey's responses to people's especially Harry's injuries. I hope we get a lot of comments from later on about the trio's injuries and lack of foood at points in the book. Can't wait for the next update

[Ithiarel]

This story is a new one for me. I'm not sure if you had a copy on FF.net or not; If you had, I must have missed it.
Which is a shame, really. Because it's really well done.
Usually, I'm a bit hesistant reading stories that involve the whole of Hogwarts reading - because at some point the writers tend to loose control over the characters due to the sheer amount of reactions they would have to write. But you managed quite well by concentrating on those characters whose reactions were the most pertinent in the given moments. Very well done. *thumbs up*

I especially liked Prof. Burbage and how she reacted to hearing about her own death. It was such a refreshing adult reaction! I wish other adult readers in other RtB stories could be a bit more like that. You managed to catch her personality so well, for a moment I thought that she might actually intervene in the "Snape-is-Dumbledore's-murderer"-Scene with somehting along the lines off: "Lay off! I'm certain he had his reasons!"
...
Gosh, now you made me thinking on a Burbage/Snape pairing...
*wanders off to think more on that*

[eskimoRock]

Jun 23, 2012 8:41:25 GMT -5 Ithiarel said:

This story is a new one for me. I'm not sure if you had a copy on FF.net or not; If you had, I must have missed it.
Which is a shame, really. Because it's really well done.
Usually, I'm a bit hesistant reading stories that involve the whole of Hogwarts reading - because at some point the writers tend to loose control over the characters due to the sheer amount of reactions they would have to write. But you managed quite well by concentrating on those characters whose reactions were the most pertinent in the given moments. Very well done. *thumbs up*

I especially liked Prof. Burbage and how she reacted to hearing about her own death. It was such a refreshing adult reaction! I wish other adult readers in other RtB stories could be a bit more like that. You managed to catch her personality so well, for a moment I thought that she might actually intervene in the "Snape-is-Dumbledore's-murderer"-Scene with somehting along the lines off: "Lay off! I'm certain he had his reasons!"
...
Gosh, now you made me thinking on a Burbage/Snape pairing...
*wanders off to think more on that*

It is on FF.net, and its got about 4 more chapters there, but I'm slowly uploading it onto here.

Thank you! I dont really want to overwhelm everyone by giving pointless OCs the lines when its a serious moment for Harry, for example.

I just thought she had to be pretty reasonable and open minded to actually teach Slytherins muggle studies in the first place, to be honest.

Now I'm thinking of that. Weird, but if it wasn't for Lily it could work...

~Emma

[bkaddictjk]

Okay... this is on my phone so please ignore grammer...

Im all for the paring, all though it makes the chapter "the princes tale" less emotional... snapes my fav character so please get his reaction right when they find out about the cupboard....

I'll b checking everyday!

[IceBlueRose]

So, I have to admit that when I knew I wouldn't be able to read for awhile, I went and used my phone to hunt this down on FFN. I have to say that I'm enjoying what you've done so far and I really want to give more detail about what I've liked but what I'm thinking of hasn't been posted here yet. (I know it's easy for someone to just look up what's on FFN like I did but I also know not everyone is doing that so to avoid spoilers on, I'll hold off for now. But I will just say that what you have happen in the beginning of the Dursleys Departing chapter is a nice way to bring in new characters and definitely one of the most original ways I've seen these particular characters brought in.)

I also wanted to give you a heads up in case you're copying/pasting from FFN. It looks like the site has done that thing where it takes out random words and it looks like it was mostly from the actual DH text.

Anyway, I can't wait for the rest to be posted here and to see what you'll be coming up with for the future chapters! Oh, and before I forget, I think that you've got them all very in character, especially Sirius and his reactions to everything.

[bkaddictjk]

you know... everyday... I begin to like ffn a lot less... and then I put up a new chapter on my fics... sometimes I don't get myself *shakes head*

I'm going to go and look up this fic it's soo good!

[1lyrical]

Nice story.

[Strange Hearts]

I really like this story, and I will definitely be continuing to read it, when you post up the rest of the chapters.

[eskimoRock]

Jun 30, 2012 4:07:07 GMT -5 IceBlueRose said:

So, I have to admit that when I knew I wouldn't be able to read for awhile, I went and used my phone to hunt this down on FFN. I have to say that I'm enjoying what you've done so far and I really want to give more detail about what I've liked but what I'm thinking of hasn't been posted here yet. (I know it's easy for someone to just look up what's on FFN like I did but I also know not everyone is doing that so to avoid spoilers on, I'll hold off for now. But I will just say that what you have happen in the beginning of the Dursleys Departing chapter is a nice way to bring in new characters and definitely one of the most original ways I've seen these particular characters brought in.)

I also wanted to give you a heads up in case you're copying/pasting from FFN. It looks like the site has done that thing where it takes out random words and it looks like it was mostly from the actual DH text.

Anyway, I can't wait for the rest to be posted here and to see what you'll be coming up with for the future chapters! Oh, and before I forget, I think that you've got them all very in character, especially Sirius and his reactions to everything.

Thank you for your review! With the thing at the start of Dursley's Departing, I just had the idea and didn't think I'd seen it before, so I just decided to see if it would work!

I'm not copying and pasting straight from there, luckily, I'm doing it from the original document on my computer.

The next chapter or two should be up today!

[bkaddictjk]

Now im regretting that i looked it up on ffn... id love a surprise... sorry. On my phone

[softasthunder]

This is such a good one! Not only is it well-written and canon, but instead of bringing back the past, you've shown us watching them in Death, which is a lot different and cooler c: you've got all the characters captured amazingly and you've managed to make this fic not only enjoyable, different, and a lot cooler, but also realistic. Amazing job!

[Strange Hearts]

Yay, new chapter. I really liked it, the only problem is that, for some strange reason, instead of quitation marks and apostrophes in the second half of the chapter (Not counting the book parts itself, that I could see), it started having this mark: �

I'm assuming that it's not what you mean to have, of course, but I have to admit, it's rather distracting while reading.

But other than that, the chapter was really good.

[eskimoRock]

Aww, damn something weird happened when I tried to upload it and I wasn't sure what had happened. I'll try and edit it out on my iPad, but if that doesn't work I'll have to see if I can get back on the computer anytime soon. Thanks for pointing it out though!

[bkaddictjk]

It's all right, we all had fun reading it just keep updating! It was really good.

[eskimoRock]

I've edited it all out now, it took ages

[bkaddictjk]

Great! Hope you update soon *hopeful*

[eskimoRock]

It will probably be either tomorrow, if I can get the time to finish it, or Wednesday because I go away Friday-Monday and it's my little brothers birthday on tuesday.

[IceLumos]

I Enjoyed The First Five Chapters & Can't Wait To Read The Rest! Keep Up The Great Work & Post Soon!

[eskimoRock]

Because all the fics are being deleted tomorrow, im setting up a mailing list for everyone who still wants chapters.