Queen and Dursleys Read Reviews

[sherza]

well, Norbert won't fuss her TOO much, because it's not deliberate. Hagrid won the egg, and DID try to keep contact with the critter to a minimum (I'm fairly sure only the Triad messed about with it at all), so it's mostly a no harm, no foul situation, especially since the thing got carted off before it could become truly dangerous.

[kumainpink]

Oh man...Fumbles is going to get it now! *happy dance*

[Kitty279]

Um ... what happened to reviewing in another thread? Doesn't seem to work that way here.

Ha, only today found this and can totally see why you couldn't resist this challenge! That selection of readers promises a lot of fun. And Dumbledore and Fudge bashing, too? Yay! Sounds like the perfect story for me

From the prologue alone I can tell that Her Majesty is not amused ;D Good, it's about time someone kicks Dumbledore, Fudge and their stooges into doing their duty! Out of the magicals, Amelia is the only one with some common sense and a sense of fairness. Doubtless why she was chosen.

Oh, I can so imagine Petunia and Vernon after getting that letter. Such a honour – BUT it must have hurt them bodily to get new clothes for Harry
*evil smirk* (Btw, shouldn't that be Privet Drive, Little Whinging, Surrey on the letter? Surrey is a county, not a city, and from the looks of it, has a number of boroughs and districts itself)

Ha, I enjoyed it immensely when Elizabeth rubbed it in how completely unable the wizards are to blend in. It's so ridiculous – the moment they get into the muggle world, they are endangering the Statue of Secrecy just so the pureblood bigots don't have anything to do with muggles.

Chambers caught on quickly. Hopefully, the Dursleys are going to be in heavy trouble – they deserve everything thrown at them and then some.

*snicker* So Elizabeth thinks that one transgression would be enough to take their autonomy away? Ha, let's see what she thinks when they are through! Usually I am not a huge fan of the Windsors, but I like your Queen. At least she doesn't take anything of that nonsense the old codger keeps spouting.

Ah, and the telling off continues! Needless to say that I agree about Harry being raised with someone in the wizarding world who just has enough sense to raise him to be level-headed.

HA! Go Amelia, the old codger deserves many more slaps! You know, if that's how they react in the first chapter alone, I can't wait for the second. And later all the stuff Harry was put through. Quirrell, the basilisk, Sirius being innocently imprisoned, Crouch jr. kissed ... If the Queen wants the headmaster already arrested, then I can't wait for the rest. I mean, he'd have to be nearly immortal to enjoy all the years of arrest that are going to add up until the end of DH!

Good to see someone acted at once and got a healer. Now the Dursleys are going to be in trouble up over their heads! *happy dance*

You know, that famous "We are not amused" would make a good title for this story as well. For I am sure that's what Her Majesty thinks, too

Anyway, I hope very much you will be able to update again soon. This is promising to be a lot of fun!

[sherza]

Jun 25, 2012 13:45:04 GMT -5 Kitty279 said:

Out of the magicals, Amelia is the only one with some common sense and a sense of fairness. Doubtless why she was chosen.

(Btw, shouldn't that be Privet Drive, Little Whinging, Surrey on the letter? Surrey is a county, not a city, and from the looks of it, has a number of boroughs and districts itself)

Chambers caught on quickly. Hopefully, the Dursleys are going to be in heavy trouble – they deserve everything thrown at them and then some.

So Elizabeth thinks that one transgression would be enough to take their autonomy away?

You know, if that's how they react in the first chapter alone, I can't wait for the second.

Amelia is also there as a representative of the Law Enforcement body, to see to it that the guilty not present at the reading get what they deserve, but yeah, she's mostly there because she's fair and sensible.

The full address actually WAS on there, I just didn't write it down because I have NO idea how the English have that sort of thing set up for mailing and what have you.

And yeah, Chambers caught on quickly ... mostly because he's been at this job a while, and has learned most of the 'tells' for abusive situations, and the Durselys are nudging at those tells from the word 'go'.

To be fair to Elizabeth ... it's a HUGE ASS transgression. According to canon, the PM *was* given a very ... brief and scattered ... heads-up at some point during Voldemort's first rampage, but there was no detail, and no one thought to *keep* the PM informed ... it was just one or two visits, as I recall. And they didn't stop to think to ask for assistance with someone who was targeting Muggles ... which put him in the province of Scotland Yard or whoever else deals with such things. It'd sort of be the equivalent of the Governor of Illinois, USA trying to deal with terrorists rampaging around, but not telling the Feds about it.

And yeah, second chapter's going to be rather epic.

[kumainpink]

Shezra, I love you so much right now. <3

[19811945]

I am definetely can't wait for the Vanishing Glass, and to see the reactions on everyone's face when they found out that Harry is a Parselmouth.

Please keep up with the good work that you doing on this story. I won't be surprised if either Amelia or Thomas looks after Harry after the books is done.

[Kitty279]

Of course, but if you have someone from the DMLE there, she's better suited than others *cough*Crouch*cough*.

From the few addresses in the UK I know, I'd say they give rather Little Whinging than Surrey, but I am sure some native on here could confirm that better than I. Besides, it's not a big matter, I just noticed.

Really like the idea of Chambers being there. He can take care of the Dursleys and Amelia of the rest. I hope they have enough paper to take notes, particularly Amelia.

As for Elizabeth, I couldn't agree more. The nonmagical world should have been informed properly. How is it that they can tell them about Sirius being on the loose, but forget to give them proper information on a war??

The more reason to hope for a quick update

[IceBlueRose]

As for Elizabeth, I couldn't agree more. The nonmagical world should have been informed properly. How is it that they can tell them about Sirius being on the loose, but forget to give them proper information on a war??

I have a feeling that Elizabeth herself is going to be wondering that. *grins at the image of how that conversation will go* And wow, I really can't wait for it to come out that Sirius was innocent and was thrown in Azkaban without a trial. And then was denied a trial again when he was nearly kissed at the end of PoA. Talk about an excuse to have a go at the wizarding world's justice system - or lack of a justice system.

[Trilonias]

I can see a lot of adults getting called to task... and afterwards, lots of children are going to be very confused. Can we see a mandatory Muggle Studies? How about a Ministry overhaul? Of course, the Queen will be sure that both sides get equal treatment... which will mostly mean forcing the wizarding side through a lot of change. Though I'm not sure what they would do with the goblins and others that don't fall under her jurisdiction.

I think this will be a very fun and interesting read.

[sherza]

*laughs* Elizabeth is going to have a *coronary* when that comes out. Seriously. Just ... yeah. VERY pissed-off Queen. That's pretty much going to be the point when she goes 'fuck it ... y'all can no longer rule yourselves. I'm taking things back over. Now shut the hell up and sit down while I get people who can actually do what's right and lawful in place and fix what you lot have broken'.

[Dimcairien]

As soon as she possibly can, she should place either Amelia Bones or Kingsley Shaklebolt into the position of Minister for Magic.

It's a really good thing there are only a few magical beings in the palace as otherwise it would be destroyed before the end of PS, if even then.

I really like this story and I hope to see another chapter soon.

Also, you might want to PM Point Given and get an actual forum of your own to post this story in as it seems to be quite popular.

[Kitty279]

Hach, just thinking about how she will tear Dumbledore and Fudge apart about Sirius is making me grinning like a loon. And I suspect Amelia won't be impressed with these two, either. The idea of Elizabeth giving her her wand back so she can hex the other two magicals into next century has its appeal!
Sherza, do you think your muse would work faster if I bribe it with chocolate, cake, or whatever she likes?

[sherza]

The Queen just very well might!

As for Muse ... it's doing a bit better. Next chapter should be out faster. Aside from just not feeling like writing, I sort of had to settle a few things in my head about the people involved (Especially Harry, who is going to be very quiet and hesitant for much of the first book, because Dursleys. And also, he's eight, a few years off from the forthright little bugger we know so well.)

[Kitty279]

Good
Oh, I understand, the beginning is the hardest when you have to work out so much.

The beginning of the story said beginning of July 1987, so he's not yet 7 But yes, he would be different, and particularly with Vernon around. I hope Amelia makes him feel a bit more safe.

You know, I want to say to take your time to develop the story properly, but a larger part of me wants the update preferably day before yesterday

[Trilonias]

I suspect that by the time Harry's going to Hogwarts after this, it's going to be a very different Harry... and a very different school too, come to think of it!

[Kitty279]

It has to be. No Dumbledore, no Snape, no Binns, no Trelawney, if I'd have to hazard a guess. Oh, and the Ministry isn't going to recognise itself any more, either.

[Trilonias]

Well, I'm not sure what will happen (I'm a little apprehensive on a couple of subjects), but I'm sure things WILL happen. I'm not too sure if everyone is going to get fired, but there may be some significant changes and additions.

Some people unfortunately will get hit by collateral damage, even if they are innocent... and at this point? The kids are. And some adults... though not many!

[katiejaneway1]

I agree with you....I can't wait for the next chapter. Dursleys are in for it now.

I can't to see the reactions to the stone, fluffy and I love how it is written.

[acevons]

All the books have moments I can't wait to see the reactions to.

[sherza]

Snape won't get fired. That much I know. Before anybody blows up at me:

He will be told point-blank to clean up his act and actually *teach*, without bias. Without Dumbledore there to protect him, knowing in advance that Harry's life isn't how he thought it was, and that Harry has more in common with Lily than James, and being a true Slytherin, and finding out just exactly what Dumbles has been up to, Snape will clean up his act and play nicely. Well, mostly. He'll still be snarky as hell.

Whatever his other faults, with the right motivation, Snape *can* control Slytherin House, unlike Slughorn, and he's also by far the better potioneer.

Besides, I have a soft spot for the guy. ;D And I like to think that given the option, he'd be a better person.

[Kitty279]

Ok, under these circumstances I'm ok with it, if that is worth anything Besides, I was always of the opinion that a good part of why he was such a bastard was that Dumbledore allowed him free rein to be as biased as he could manage to "keep his spy cover". So, if he has the choice to behave or get sacked, I can see him change a bit. Particularly together with the other circumstances you mentioned.
And of course he has to be still snarky, otherwise he wouldn't even be recognisable.

[Dimcairien]

Yay! I'm glad Snape will still be around at Hogwarts because even though he is majorly biased, I still like him.

[sherza]

To be fair to Snape, if Dumbledore's actions at the end of Book 1 are any indication, Snape *needs* to be biased towards his own House. 'cause let's face it, giving the Cup to the Slytherins then yanking it out from under them with last-second points was a pretty douchy thing to do. He should have given those points *before* the feast, if he gave them at all. And most of the other teachers seem to have a 'Slytherin = guilty/evil' mentality. Which is not always wrong, but it jumps the gun. The Slytherins definitely need someone on their side. That said, Snape really does need to figure out a better way to advocate on their behalf.

[kumainpink]

Exactly! That part of book one really pissed me off! How the fuck is any of that fair? >=0

[Kitty279]

That was certainly not fair. But I guess it is a vicious circle - Snape is so biased that he reinforces the Slytherin=evil. The way he treats the other houses gives them that impression. They act accordingly, then the Slytherins - or at least people like Malfoy - try to pay them back ... the teachers all do their best to make things worse.
Still not convinced that Snape needed to be that much of a bastard, myself, but I've explained that before.

[acevons]

Yay sherza, Snape needs a chance.

[19811945]

Could the Queen force the teachers to come to Buckingham Palace to give a right stern talking to regarding their abilities. They could then see the errors of their ways, along with Dumbledore being the master manipulator.

[sherza]

I might end up having Snape come, yeah. He's the main one that needs a talking to. McGonagall's really fairly sensible as things go. Plus, I don't want too many people there. Sirius will be there at the end of third book, because Harry desperately needs someone on his side, and Sirius will quite happily kill and die for Harry, but I want to keep additions to a minimum, and if I start adding too many, it'll get cumbersome as heck.

[Kitty279]

Ah yes, please let Sirius come then, you know I love him, and he would be good for Harry. But you are right, too many people are hard to handle. The second story I am working on (with a friend) is a RtB story, and even if there aren't that many people around, it's difficult not to forget anyone.

[Silvertongue]

YAY! You must keep Snape on as a teacher! ^_^

I love how you've portrayed the Queen and that you refer to her as Elizabeth and not "the Queen".